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Mega Man Battle Network: The Fan Fic [VERSION 2.0!?]
Topic Started: Dec 11 2010, 08:29 AM (582 Views)
Junky One
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You know that story JunkMan.EXE/Punk.EXE made a while back? The one he said he'd finish, but which ended right before the chapter that he said was his favorite!? You should recognize the name, since it's...pinned to the top of this page.

I'm his sibling who, for some reason (probably just to try out writing skills on a project-thing.), started trying to rewrite the story. (If you don''t believe me, I'll just get Punk to log in for a split second and post confirming this?) In a sense this whole account was a device with which to post this story, but I'm also kinda roaming around the forum and playin' some Battle Network.

But you don't care about that. You care about the story, kind of. Punk's read over this thing and gave it the thumbs-up an' all. Without further ado, here's the first chapter. May add a table of contents to this post.

Chapter 1


COMMENTARY: Uh...no, not really for this chapter. Nothing EXCEPT...if you have any ideas for jokes, Navis, areas, or just neat crap you want to have happen in this story, post it or PM me!
Chapter Two is already pretty much done. I might go over it and add stuff like description, reader suggestions, etc. So please, suggest stuff! Even if it's a Navi who will appear forty chapters into the future!
Lastly, I have no schedule for updating yet. On one hand, I'm a slacker. On the other hand, I'm really getting into writing the IceMan chapter. So after a short while, I'll hopefully decide on something.
Edited by Junky One, Dec 11 2010, 02:43 PM.
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I like it...It's pretty funny, I hope to see more installments of your Fanfic soon.
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Um, let's put it to words on my opinions:
1. Your descriptions were too little.
2. Too much dialogue.
3. It got boring too fast.
4. You used too many uppercase words.
5. Your grammar is bad.
6. You need to fix some of your punctuation.

6/10.
Edited by Other Kris, Dec 11 2010, 10:45 AM.
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Thanks for giving your honest opinions...! I don't want people to just say "it's great" all the time. I'll try to go over it and see what I can improve, what could be more exciting, so on so forth, then.
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