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Bleach - The real story; The real story with some extras.
Topic Started: Dec 27 2008, 12:29 PM (483 Views)
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I was bored and since I think about things like that since a while and animes are currently better than my real life, I decided to write it and post it. The whole story will be on my blog Bleach - The real story. I hope you will like it. Anyway. Everything I post in my blog, will be posted here as well.
So lets begin! =D

The Beginning

While the Bountos are in the real world, a new person have joined the 13th Court Guard Squad. His name is Chiisu Hitsugaya, the one who was adopted by Toshiro Hitsugaya. He joined the 13th Squad, where Ukitake is the captain. While the time he made friends with the members of the Squad. One day, at a mission he met up with Rukia Kuchiki, which almost never is seen in her squad because of her activities in the real world.
They've become friends and ended the mission with a S-Rank.
Suprisingly, Byakuya Kuchiki respects Chiisu...

Current time: Inoue was taken to Hueco Mundo by Ulqiorra seconds ago...

Chiisu: *at Ukitake*Captain?
Ukitake: What is it?
Chiisu: Well... I wanted to know if...
Ukitake: If you are allowed to visit the real world?
Chiisu: Yes... How did you know, Captain?
Ukitake: I can feel it. ^^ Well... Currently we have some problems... High Captain Yamamoto does not allow anyone to go to the real world now because of some incidents there...
Chiisu: But Captain... Why is Rukia always allowed to=
Ukitake: Well... She has lots of friends there. She helped them out a lot and they helped us out a lot, too.
Chiisu: Okay... Got it. Just let me know when I am allowed to visit the real world....


*some time later Ichigo and the others are on their way to Hueco Mundo to rescue Inoue*


Byakuya:*to someone from his squad*Let Chiisu Hitsugaya come to me immediatly.
Person from Squad: Yes, sir!

*some minutes later*

Chiisu: Captain Kuchiki-Sama. You told me to come here?
Byakuya: Calm down... I need you to do something.
Chiisu: What is it Captain Kuchiki-Sama?
Byakuya: First of all stop talking like that... Just call me Captain or Byakuya.
Chiisu: Oh... I am sorry Captain... Please go on.
Byakuya: I need you to go to the real world. You have to go to a person called 'Urahara Kisuke'.
Chiisu: But... Noone is allowed to use the Senkai Gate to get there and why do you need me?
Byakuya: You have to go after my sister to Hueco Mundo from there and help them out. I know how strong you are and they will need your strength to survive...
Chiisu: I understood! But how can I get there without getting noticed?
Byakuya: I am from the Kuchiki-Clan. We have our own Senkai Gate. You will be allowed to use this one.
Chiisu: Okay! I will get ready. I will go after them and help them!
Byakuya: Good Luck, Chiisu... You will need it. Bring my sister back savely. And this is for you as well. *hands over a cape*
Chiisu: Thank you, Byakuya...

*Chiisu prepares to settle off when...*

Ukitake: What do you think you are going to do, Chiisu?
Chiisu:(Dammit!)Captain! Well, I...
Ukitake: Don't say a word... It's okay. I haven't seen you... Make whatever you want. I haven't seen you going to the real world. Just good luck and be careful, Chiisu!
Chiisu: Thank you Captain Ukitake-Sama!

*Chiisu finally gets off*

To be continued...





Extra: Profile of Chiisu Hitsugaya

Name: Chiisu Hitsugaya
Age: 16
Squad: 13th, normal member
Zanpaktou: Hyourinmaru
Bankai: Not available NOW.
Interests: Fighting, Kidou-Training, Sword-Training, sleeping and a specific person.
Dis-Likes: Captain Soi-Fon, Running away from a fight, being to weak to beat the enemy

Edit: Sorry Nemo. I forget about the "coloured thread rules". I just read the rules again. I am sorry.
Edited by Kris, Dec 28 2008, 02:20 AM.
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I don't want edit this topic third time and You don't want forcing me for doing that.
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Wow...I never thought that I'd ever see a Bleach fic. It's meh, I'm not very fond of it. And I'd like more description, please. I dislike the timeframe skips you use and I also don't like script format, but you can make it work. The time skippage makes it too short, since we could know what had happened then instead of giving us vague descriptions of the main idea. Lastly I don't like fics where we add characters to events currently happening or happened already.
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The only thing I will find odd is how 2 people will have the same Zanpaktou. After seeing Diamond Dust Rebellion. That isn't allowed.
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Dec 28 2008, 10:27 PM
Wow...I never thought that I'd ever see a Bleach fic. It's meh, I'm not very fond of it. And I'd like more description, please. I dislike the timeframe skips you use and I also don't like script format, but you can make it work. The time skippage makes it too short, since we could know what had happened then instead of giving us vague descriptions of the main idea. Lastly I don't like fics where we add characters to events currently happening or happened already.
Remember: don't start a project unless you know you'll finish it. Hold onto your story and make it work!
Ok o.o I will start from the whole beginning and it is not just import a person at a current event. The story will change a lot till than but I realize that I have to edit that. I will change the story from beginning so everyone knows what directly happens =) Just leave me some time and I will do it from the whole beginning ^^

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Dec 28 2008, 11:15 PM
The only thing I will find odd is how 2 people will have the same Zanpaktou. After seeing Diamond Dust Rebellion. That isn't allowed.

I know that. I watched "The Diamond Dust Rebellion" as well. That is a little secret later in the series. Chiisu don't directly have Hyourinmaru but I don't want to spoil ^^ So just wait and see ^^
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Aww...I like spoilers...:)
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Since it will take some while till I can begin with a new layout...

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By the way... I thought about a brand new intro from beginning... This will be awesome and not like that shitty story above XD
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So.. all of this is happening a the same time, the Bounts and Hueco Mundo?
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Nope it isn't... Well... This was kinda buggy XD As said before, I will do it from complete beginning. But I will post only complete Arc's so it will take some time. Maybe I will release normal parts like the series... about 25 episodes are 1 arc. So maybe I will do episodes as well... Still dunno.
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